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    Jay's Lyrics Thread

    Post by Cpt. Barbarossa on Wed Jul 21, 2010 10:23 am

    Okay, so as some of you may or may not know, I'm a musician, with my own (until recently) working band, and I'm the main lyricist.

    It only just occurred to me that I could post a few of my ideas, to give you a flavour of what kind of stuff I write, as well as some completely different things, that I've not been able to introduce to my band for one reason or another.

    So, here goes.

    Escape

    How can you hope to make it alive
    When the only way to live is to die
    And with deaths jaws lying open
    How can you live with any hope

    When the only way to live is to die
    And with deaths jaws lying open
    How can you live with any hope
    With the fires of hell falling from the sky

    And with deaths jaws lying open
    How can you live with any hope
    With the fires of hell falling from the sky
    How can you hope to make it alive?
    (C)Synapse 2010

    This is definitely one of our heaviest songs, and is blindingly fast, under 2 minutes. I used a form of verse called pantoum, which is a Malay verse form. I first discovered this form through Rush's song The Larger Bowl.

    This second song is a blues piece I've written, and is bioautographical. For some reason my parents are very grumpy on Sundays. See what you think.

    Momma's Hurt

    Momma's got rule in vein
    Iron grip, on this reign
    He hit small with a stick
    'Tidy your room, make it quick'
    Well Momma, she got wise words,
    But no one pay attention to her hurt

    I said, Momma, I gotta play I gotta go
    She looked at me dead, with a face like a po
    Well daddy said no, he so cruel
    But Momma said yes, she so cool
    Well Momma, she got wise words,
    But no one pay attention to her hurt
    (C)Jay Hall 2009

    Next up is an old tune, one of the first I wrote, and the first song that Synapse recorded. You can hear this one by clicking the Like Metal? link in my sig.

    Dark of the Day
    Escape from reality
    Out of the everlasting night
    The evermore whirlwind of despair
    Spiralling down into hell

    Searching for an end to the waste
    Search for forgiveness
    An end to the light of the night
    Searching for a relief from the pain
    Search for the Devils’ Salt
    An end to the dark of the day

    Now it’s come to this
    I bow to the wants and needs
    Of the scum, villainy and filth
    Come crawling faster, life burning faster

    Searching for an end to the waste
    Search for forgiveness
    An end to the light of the night
    Searching for a relief from the pain
    Search for the Devils’ Salt
    An end to the dark of the day

    Searching for an end to the waste
    Search for forgiveness
    An end to the light of the night
    Searching for a relief from the pain
    Search for the Devils’ Salt
    An end to the dark of the day

    The sneering faces upon the walls
    Friends watch me in sadness
    Foes watch me in delirium
    Bowing to my own master

    Searching for an end to the waste
    Search for forgiveness
    An end to the light of the night
    Searching for a relief from the pain
    Search for the Devils’ Salt
    An end to the dark of the day
    (C) Synapse 2009

    Constructive crit/comments welcome. If you think it's shit, say why please Smile


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    Re: Jay's Lyrics Thread

    Post by HellBent Sin on Wed Jul 21, 2010 2:49 pm

    I like Momma's hurt the best
    Dark of the day i already know
    and Escape, I haven't heard..yet...
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    Post by Cpt. Barbarossa on Wed Jul 21, 2010 2:52 pm

    Escape, you won't hear that for at least a couple of months. Assuming we ever record it :/


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    Post by TravM on Wed Jul 21, 2010 3:46 pm

    Jay, your fucking creative as hell. I loved these. I really liked Momma's Hurt and Escape the best. Dark of the Day is great, but I like the other two better.
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    Post by Cpt. Barbarossa on Wed Jul 21, 2010 3:48 pm

    Why thank you Trav ^.^

    I'll post a couple more in a bit.

    ... Maybe Razz

    EDIT: These two are probably going to end up on the third Synapse record (the first being the EP that came out in January, the second being the album we're working on now)

    This first one was written at the height of a family problem.. the last line of the song is fictional - the person to whom I refer is currently alive and well.

    Perspective

    Awww shut the fuck up!

    You say you're doing this for the greater good
    You need to let go of your stupid little feud
    I'd like to take everything you do and expose it for what it is
    There's nothing left to believe in and we feel pretty damn used

    Everyone has a different story to tell
    All of them wrong
    All of them true
    It's a matter of perspective
    No one is wrong
    Nothing is right

    I'd like to erase every moment of time with you
    I want to go to the other side and show you the lies you spread
    An eye for an eye leaves the whole world blind
    But I sure as fuck don't wanna see you anymore

    Everyone has a different story to tell
    All of them wrong
    All of them true
    It's a matter of perspective
    No one is wrong
    Nothing is right

    Everyone had a different story to tell
    All of them wrong
    None of them true
    No one had perspective
    Everyone was wrong
    Nothing was right

    And now she's dead because of your lie
    (C)Jay Hall 2010

    I was quite upset when I wrote that, I think.

    Now, this second one is pretty much open to interpretation (As are all of them - songs only have meanings which you as a person attach to them), so I'll let you mull this one over, rather than explain it.

    Hot Blood Cold Steel

    I ran away but now I'm back
    I'm doomed to be stuck in your maze
    I feel the heated blade, I'll attack
    I've had enough of your silly fucking games

    The hot blood and cold steel of this war
    Get me away from needing more

    Don't feed me anything else now
    My fire deep inside is bloated
    I can hate nothing more of you now
    I am already enslaved into solitude

    The hot blood and cold steel of this war
    Just gets me away from needing more

    The hot blood and cold steel of this war
    Please get me away from needing more

    Sink the blade into my chest
    Make the pain and torment end
    I'll never be good enough at my best
    So quit torturing me and make my reality bend

    The hot blood and cold steel of this war
    Just gets me away from needing more

    The hot blood and cold steel of this war
    Please get me away from needing more

    And now I break free of your constraints and this is how I do it, I hope it fucks up your vicious little plans, I never want to see you again you insecure malevolent manipulative whore!
    (C)Jay Hall 2010

    Hmm. Hot Blood And Cold Steel feels a bit rough around the edges. Idk. Opinions?


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    Post by TravM on Wed Jul 21, 2010 4:40 pm

    Do it man. I really like these. Smile
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    Post by TravM on Wed Jul 21, 2010 4:53 pm

    I don't mean to get your hopes up, but I don't really care too much for those songs. I like the first lyrics you've posted more, but you are very creative and you have great lyrics. I just don't know how they would fit as a song. ^_^
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    Post by Cpt. Barbarossa on Wed Jul 21, 2010 4:56 pm

    Hmm, same. I shocked myself.

    I hear how they work in my head.. It's just the content is a little... Idk, I didn't know I could be that angry with the world :/

    EDIT: So I'm feelign a little blue today, and while this first song IS NOT MINE, I certainly love it enough to share it.

    Nobody Home

    I've got a little black book with my poems in
    Got a bag with a toothbrush and a comb in
    When I'm a good dog
    They sometimes throw me the bone in

    I got elastic bands keepin' my shoes on
    Got those swollen hand blues
    I got thirteen channels of shit on the TV to choose from
    I've got electric light

    And I've got second sight
    I got amazing powers of observation
    And that is how I know, when I try to get through
    On the telephone to you, there'll be nobody home

    I've got the obligatory Hendrix perm and the inevitable pinhole burns
    Now all down the front of my favorite satin shirt
    I've got nicotine stains on my fingers, I've got a silver spoon on a chain
    Got a grand piano to prop up my mortal remains

    I've got wild staring eyes
    And I've got a strong urge to fly, but I got nowhere to fly to
    Ooh, babe when I pick up the phone there is still nobody home
    I've got a pair of Gohills boots and I got fading roots
    (C)Roger Waters 1979

    Now this second one is mine.. I don't know what to do with it. Maybe it doesn't warrant it's own music. I don't know.

    Would I Pretend?

    I don't know where I'm going
    What now? What else?

    Now I know you'll say that nothing will ever change,
    But why do you think I'll stay the same?

    Now I know you've said before that I'll never change,
    But how much longer would I pretend?

    Exactly how much longer would I pretend to you?
    (C)Jay Hall 2009

    And finally... this.

    Running On Empty

    I'm running on empty
    I've given all I can give
    I'm trying on empty and
    I'm drowning in space

    I see before me this destroyed wasteland
    Nuclear apocalypse, A myth, the product
    Of a million twisted minds hearts and souls

    This generational imagination, racial
    Annihilation is in our dusty blood
    The promise of salvation is no more

    I'm running on empty
    I've given all I can give
    I'm trying on empty and
    I'm driving to achieve

    I hold this flame in my hand as a
    Beacon of truth and the tender licks
    At my hand, serves a reminder of life

    The truth is a malevolent slanderer
    Treading under false pretences
    Twisting shape and form to suit the liar

    I'm running on empty
    I've given all I can give
    I'm trying on empty but
    I can't run on nothing

    Nothing is what I have
    Nothings is what I achieve, cos
    I'm running on empty
    Running on empty

    I'm running on empty
    I've given all I can give
    I'm trying on empty but
    I can't run on nothing

    Nothing is what I have
    Nothings is what I achieve, cos
    I'm running on empty
    Running on empty
    (C)Jay Hall 2010

    See what you think of those...


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    Re: Jay's Lyrics Thread

    Post by Blood on Thu Jul 22, 2010 7:23 pm

    Jay,I LOVE these. My favorites are Escape, Hot Blood Cold Steel, and Running On Empty.

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