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    Hollywood
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    Hey Dad

    Post by Hollywood on Fri Jul 23, 2010 7:59 pm

    Hey dad
    How's it been?
    Living the good life
    Must feel like a sin

    Well in case you're wondering
    And I doubt you are
    We're low on money
    But you got a new car

    Mom works long hours
    To make sure I have food
    Yet you lay around
    Acting like we're rude

    You play childish games
    While my mother cries
    She can barely get up
    Because of your drunken lies

    You ruined her life
    Back in '95
    And then I came in
    Happy and alive

    But look at me now
    Breaking down
    Starving for food
    And I'm the clown?

    But this is how I handle it
    Writing a rhyme
    Instead of your games
    It's not happening this time.

    But in the end
    I'll pull through
    But I don't know about you


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    Re: Hey Dad

    Post by Cpt. Barbarossa on Fri Jul 23, 2010 8:08 pm

    I love it Ty.

    Put some music to that, and you have yourself some moody prog rock too Very Happy


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    Re: Hey Dad

    Post by TheLatterGoesDown. on Fri Jul 23, 2010 8:46 pm

    Tyler this is GREAT. Smile


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    Re: Hey Dad

    Post by CantBeTamed on Sat Jul 24, 2010 3:58 am

    Really Good Writing
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    Re: Hey Dad

    Post by Hollywood on Sat Jul 24, 2010 12:04 pm

    Thanks guys.

    And Jay, when I somehow pick up the guitar it's a possibility Wink


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    Re: Hey Dad

    Post by Maverick on Sat Jul 24, 2010 2:29 pm

    Good shit bro. Though we need some vulgarity to it makes it all the better Wink
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    Re: Hey Dad

    Post by TravM on Sat Jul 24, 2010 2:39 pm

    Not much to say Ty, besides that it's really great. You should do more of these poems. Maybe not this particular subject, but something else. You're a good writer.
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    Re: Hey Dad

    Post by Hollywood on Sat Jul 24, 2010 3:37 pm

    Thanks again. I'm trying to pick up some more writing, I was just really depressed last night so it came to me.

    And Ronnie, I would've except I couldn't fit "you asshole fucking bitch" in there.


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    Re: Hey Dad

    Post by Blood on Sat Jul 24, 2010 6:31 pm

    Love it Tyler.

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